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My Essay Experience
After much analysis of different films and articles, I was able to create a scholarly essay responding to the course's main question: How do Disney films contribute to the construction of society's values and norms about gender roles? How have these values changed over time?
Section 1: Planning and Exploratory Writing
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For the assignment, I was required to collect fragments of the film, analytically describing what specific characters say, do, and look like.
Looking back on previous assignments, I believe this analysis of a line in the film Guardians of the Galaxy, accurately represents the course objective of applying reading skills to various kinds of text, in this case, films.
From this assignment, I was able to analyze and put my own interpretation of the character's personality and how it represents the subject of gender expectations within the specific film.
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Section 11: Peer Review
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The first image shows the best advice that I have received in terms of peer review. In general, the advice was very informative and precise with its wording. It also tells me specifically what in general was wrong with my wording instead of just telling me to shorten my paragraph.
The second image shows the best advice that I have given to my peers. I believe that my advice was insightful and even gives an option that the writer could use for their revision. From this, I've learned that giving advice to others helps me realize my own mistakes within my writing since I have probably made similar mistakes.
Section 111: Self-Review
Based on the given screenshot from the self-review assignment, I will need to shorten my essay by ridding of colloquialisms and repetitive sentences. This will ultimately shorten my whole essay since I noticed that it is over the word limit.
In my other self-review response, I realized that I needed to be more concise with my words to enhance my overall point. By analyzing my own text, I was able to recall English writing skills that I have learned in the past. In addition, self-review has helped me come to terms with my own mistakes and how to proactively prevent mistakes I have made before.
Section 1111: Revision
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Both images are from the same section of the essay, which is the second body paragraph. In the before image, I realized that my analysis after the quotation was very sporadic when I originally intended to analyze Ariel's values only. Some of my sentences were structured awkwardly as well. My wording affected my conciseness and ability to express my thoughts effectively.
In the revised form of my essay, I ended up reconstructing and shifting sentences around within the paragraph. By doing so, I think my ideas are more coherent and placed in a sequential order that effectively expresses my analysis. I also made sure to include transition phrases in appropriate places.
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